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Too old for this phate
created: 06/05/07 3:22AM









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It's a cold, hard town

The searing hot sting of a laser sliced through his shoulder like a Mercury sunrise--the planet not the drink. 'Pistol' Pete Derringer staggered against the hard, impersonal steel of the bar.

'A simple 'no' would suffice,' he said, dropping the alien hypercube into his pocket and reaching for his own sidearm.

The whiny drone of the synthetic barkeep repeatedly shouted 'no weapons'.

Pete dropped and rolled, taking aim as the hardwired Hotshot flew over the dirty, square tables of the SolarWind. Propelled by neurocybernetically enhanced quadriceps and powered by an internal micro-fusion array, it was more thing than man.

Landing on the tables it met three rounds of pulse-plasma from Pete's Colt .666 Rectifier. The high-energy globs seared a trio of holes in its chest, relaxing the subatomic particle fidelity where they passed. Atoms and molecules simply fell apart.

The Hotshot lifted its gun, paused and fell backward, crashing to the floor.

Pete climbed slowly to his feet, 'I'm too old for this phate,' he said, looking to the barkeep. Dropping a fiver on the bar, he stepped out into the cold, dark night and the unforgiving urban jungle of the asteroid city Eden.





18:19 EST   Jun 11th, 2007 – by Cynthia Prusso
Simian would you see if its possible to write a prologue so we know some history!



04:08 EST   Jun 12th, 2007 – by Chris Tarling
I think it's better this way.. allows the next person to be creative and to interpret the story as they like.



14:10 EST   Jun 13th, 2007 – by Cynthia Prusso
Yes master story teller easy for you to say!



05:47 EST   Jun 15th, 2007 – by Chris Tarling
I was just expressing an opinion and you decided to turn it into an insult, and since we're throwing them about: at least I do not feel the need to give 5 bananas on my own snippets to boost my rating. Anyway, this is a wonderfully written piece Simon. I especially like how it starts media res; Definitely 5 bananas.



22:28 EST   Jun 15th, 2007 – by Lucy Australopithecus
This story rocks! I keep trying to think of something/find a place to add, but I can't contrive anything brilliant enough and I feel like any input I have will only diminish the overall awesomeness of this one. But I thought I'd still let you know that I am enjoying it even if I can't figure out a way to help it grow!



13:59 EST   Jul 2nd, 2007 – by Cynthia Prusso
Lucy with such a creative last name I am certain you could be a great addition to this story ... I feel the same way each time I add snippets. Throw away the fear and go for it! Ms Australopithecus! Great name!



20:28 EST   Jul 2nd, 2007 – by Nina Zito
I am adding my unsolicited two cents here. This is a fabulously creative story-seed. I like the .666 Rectifier.



12:50 EST   Feb 24th, 2008 – by Chris Sadler
The title of this story can mean but one thing: Simian Simon is a Miami Dolphins fan...



23:49 EST   Mar 30th, 2008 – by Penny Groff
You rock.



09:20 EST   Jun 20th, 2008 – by Louis Gross
WOW



21:44 EST   May 1st, 2010 – by Lea Kim
A steady four-point-oh. You're kind of grokking the horrorshow here a bit, aren't you?















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